Clock watching.



Waiting for No Man.

Mr Dufour looked at the line of people; several days worth easily, perhaps even weeks. They snaked between the weighty columns of the room and bent out of the door. He couldn’t see the end of the queue outside, but he knew it was forever growing.

When he first started taking requests from his visitors, his heart said yes to almost every appeal. Dying parents that needed more time, lost children that required longer to be found, even the young at heart that weren’t ready to grow old. But with every yes he gave, a hundred more of the same would journey to his door, and with every granted wish, his creation would be forced into overdrive.

When he discovered the bottling of time he made a promise that he would never take it for himself. But hundreds of thousands of requests later and he was weak and he felt old. The skin on his hands was thinning, his spine was beginning to curve, and his once coarse black hair was now an unkempt tuft of grey clinging to a line between his ears at the back of his head.

Initially he thought he had changed the world for the better. Over time he came to realise that he had just made it more arduous. The further he prolonged life the longer everyone needed to live, the more time he gave those who were failing, the more they needed to succeed. The days he granted to the dying meant the diseases became more aggressive, the hours he presented to the needy made them less able to survive next time. It was this very morning that he noticed more of his hair scattered across his pillow, and he knew a dark cloud was lurking in the distance.


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  1. […] is my contribution to Laura’s Literary Lion challenge, which has a 400 word maximum. This week the Literary Lion has supplied the prompt word […]

  2. Something supposed to help ends up hurting. There are always consequences! I love the idea of this – a guy bottling time with a huge queue waiting outside, the whole thing driving him to an early grave.

    1. Time is just one of those mysteries you cannot mess with, I think the throngs of sci-fi movies I’ve grown up with have suggested that!

  3. […] in response to the Literary Lion’s Clock Watching story prompt. This is the result of Blogging 101’s day thirteen task which was to try another […]

  4. […] response to the literary lion writing […]

  5. You freaky mind reader this is exactly what I thought of writing when I read theme Time.

    But you wrote it better. Great one!

    1. Haha, sorry, I guess I do always get there first when it comes to this challenge… but thank you!

      1. Since you give prompts can I suggest something?
        Can you list out the people who have participated in the prompt?
        I want to check theirs also, link their post to mine too

        1. The best thing to do is to go to the wordpress reader and search the tag ‘Literary Lion’. It is usually only used for this challenge, and that’s one of the rules I set out each week so everyone can find each other’s work. I am looking into collating some sort of list that people can add too, but I need to find something quite low maintenance for me otherwise I might not find the time! 😉

          1. Hehe yeah sure!

  6. […] post was written in response to the Literary Lion writing challenge, with the week’s word being […]

  7. I just published a post in response to your weekly prompt of Time. I tagged it with Literary Lion. But I don’t know how to pingback. The link of my post is this:

    1. I think you discovered the pingback without trying, it did work, I’m just reading it now!

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