AM.

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Wake up.

I became aware of the frown on my face as soon as I gained consciousness. A radiant ray glistened from the window across my left eye. It narrowed the pupil and created warmth in a strip along my skin. The sunlight was headache inducing.

Dusty particles pirouetted across the beam, vanishing as soon as they crossed to the other side. I took a deep breath and a pungent stench attacked my insides. I opened my mouth to avoid it, but the smell enveloped my lungs after clinging to the back of my throat.

I tried to stand. My legs weren’t listening, they stayed heavy on the floor. As I shifted my head away from the sunlight the rest of the room became clear.

I was just one of many.

Rows and rows of them and the only one moving was me.

 

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38 Comments

  1. 19 June 2015 / 9:47 am

    Interesting choice of “them” at the end, rather than “us”.

    I failed last week. I wrote “woods” at the very top of a new sheet of A4 and all I though about was teddy bears.

    I’m in this week. And have also gone for your theme of shafts of light in the mornings. πŸ™‚

    • 19 June 2015 / 7:06 pm

      Thanks, I was going for the mysterious tone I guess. Teddy Bears aren’t all that bad, but it’s as if your head is filled with fluffy clouds and rainbows and unicorns.

      • 19 June 2015 / 11:06 pm

        If I could get the teddybears/clouds/rainbows/unicorns combo out of my skull, I may be able to write something serious.

  2. 22 June 2015 / 3:00 pm

    Nice and creepy Laura. I like the contrast from a glistening radiant ray of sunlight to a hideous stench.

    • 23 June 2015 / 11:24 am

      Thank you! I’m glad you noticed, usually sunlight brings with it thoughts of freshness and the open air, but I saw this space quite differently.

  3. 22 June 2015 / 5:08 pm

    Great story – reminds me of being a student and waking up disorientated, somewhere strange, with a blistering hangover πŸ™‚ Very well described.
    I finally did my story! Better last minute than never.

    • 23 June 2015 / 11:28 am

      Much better late than never! Haha, I’m such a lightweight I never could quite drink enough to induce a hangover even as a student, I’m nor sure if that was a good thing or a bad thing…

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